I need your opinion pls

The process of creating a poem is one that I wish that I even had close to down. It’s one of those things that are pretty much as sporadic as the mood swings that I wish I could overcome. Anyway, I didn’t mean to go that deep into a tangent in such a short amount of time. When it comes to my own personal development of artistic literary pieces it is always usually dictated off of one factor, that being the title, and whether I think of the idea for the poem itself first, or whether I think of the title first. For this specific piece that I am going to be sharing today I decided on the title first. This wasn’t because I couldn’t think of what to write (it was) but because I thought of it and how many metaphorical vises I could attach to it. But anyway here is the poem itself, I want to hear all of your opinions and process though too. I will touch on that in a second.

 

Pomegranate seed 

 

Love me like a pomegranate seed

 

An aperture of translucence.

A reddish glow.

Shapes crafted ever so

meticulously that it’s

as if it was molded

at the fingertips of

Gaea herself.

 

Love me even though none of that matters.

 

For the beauty of

an individual seed does

not span beyond the 

confines of the fruit’s rind.

 

As does the beauty

of any physical being,

when left in a room

full of people.

 

500 seeds to a single fruit.

My beauty is not my own.

 

Yet it is I who is awarded with the privilege of your love.



Whether you like or hate this poem is one thing, I don’t even know if I like it but I hope the publication I submitted to likes it enough.  But anyway there are a couple things that I wanted to touch on when it comes to the process of writing poems. For the most part I think that majority of the things in which I have written have originated not from a title but from an overall idea of the piece. However this one does not specifically possess that same background, and to be honest I am not exactly sure if I need to do any other poems like this, I know it is important to have a strong basis however I don’t think that there was for this piece, it was only the two words that created the title. So I just want to hear everyones opinion on itt. :))))

 

Author: Cooper Brumfield

hi, im cooper (he/him) i enjoy classical art, writing poetry, and cooking. My favorite authors are hanya yanigahara, dorian gray, and mary shelly. and my main goal is to one day be someone elses favorite author. i hope that through this blog others are able to peer into my inner mindset and understand me through my work.

2 thoughts on “I need your opinion pls”

  1. What a neat process! I have a lot of trouble coming up with titles, so I’ve never done this before, but it sounds like a super neat exercise. As for the poem, I have a bit of trouble connecting pomegranate seeds to love, but I think it’s super interesting you compared the two. The wording and figurative language is also super tasty (like pomegranate seeds.)

  2. I really enjoyed your piece, especially the last three lines.
    I personally took it as though the seeds of the grapefruit were like people. Each is molded and crafted specifically. as if created by a divine creator, in your piece, Gaea. and in the last few lines, it’s describing yourself as one of these seeds, and I think asking, “If everyone is beautiful then why was I rewarded with your love?” This might be a far stretch but that’s what I got from it, but either way I really enjoyed it.

    But you were talking about the process earlier, and for me personally, I take a small feeling I had and the scenario and try to condense and pack it into a simple idea, and I try to use simple vocabulary as much as possible to add to the “condensed” feeling.

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