Loose buttons,
paint stained hands and sand filled hair.
The love for someone that shouldn’t hold hold his heart,
time taken from a family too soon.
Stone cold heart turned to mush turned to stone,
turned human.
Disguise ridden life idled at the sight of a crooked smile,
ghosts talking through destruction, through the voice in her head.
Time taken to heal was almost too long,
Some love stories aren’t just about other people.
I love how short and impactful this really is. With every line, you delivered a certain punch that I really enjoyed. This put an image into my head and made me feel emotion, which is really the goal. Great job!
I admire how each line seems as though it is pertaining to something different than the previous one, but it all ties back together with that last line. Also, how you did a simple kind of love story, but said it wasn’t solely about other people. Great poem.
Every single line delivered a punch of wind that makes your reader think. Think in detail about every line, about every point your making, and the little messages hidden within each. I like how it starts with “loose buttons”, and is called “I’ll Give You the Sun”, yet there’s so much more than what the reader immediately thinks. I love this poem, and wish to know more about it, which, I think, is a perfect way to write. :)))))
I absolutely love the book this poem is inspired by, love the way you put your own twist on the characters from the book in this poem. It really does hit head when you say the lines, ” stone cold heart turned to mush turned to stone turned to human”. I love this poem, good work!